I just LOVE how you all worked so hard at writing your Lost at the Show stories today – such concentration and focus! I am looking forward to hearing a few of them when we share during Author’s Circle – especially where you used SPECIFIC DETAILS and SHOW DON’T TELL!
Wow! You guys all have such rich holiday memories. I love the way you have worked hard to create holiday memory sentences with SPECIFIC DETAILS that engage your reader and share your feelings during each experience! Great job! Now sit back and enjoy the full poem we have created as a class! 🙂
Our group of Room 6 students
had a really great holiday
they went places, did things
and all have lots to say:
Mrs Veary stood
ankle deep in the water
and handfed a dolphin
called Piccolo,
Charlie felt like a real cook
roasting marshmellows golden-brown
on the campfire near the shed,
Meg was terrified zooming around those tilting tracks
on Big Thunder Mountain Rollercoaster
in Disneyland Paris –
with her hair sticking out on end,
Jay celebrated
with his whole entire soccer team
playing hide-and-seek chasey
at the Colonial,
Cassidy was ecstatic
with the dancing and music
in the live show “Alladin”
at the Casino in Perth,
Ivy ate the Biggest Pink French Macaroon
she had ever set her eyes on
under the Eiffel Tower
with a French sun
shining over her,
Heidi very nervously
fed Rex the horse a carrot treat
out in the far paddock,
Felix toasted marshmallows
till they burnt black
at a friend’s fire on Saturday night,
Sid was so excited
with his red soccerball from his stepdad
for coming seventeeth
in the Cross-Country,
Tilly saw the red dirt and felt the dry heat
of the Pilbara
when she explored
her Dad’s worksite,
Jai cooked
big fluffy pancakes
with his dad,
Ayla collected shells and a dried out starfish
along a beach up North
to create a beautiful picture frame,
Jenna caught seven blue swimmer crabs
while living right on the beach
at Mandurah,
Dominic curled up inside
his green and red dinosaur sleeping bag
when he went camping
with his dad,
Nicholas excitedly bought
a new Nintendo 3dx XL
and set it up ready to go
as soon as his Mum got home,
Kye L. couldn’t even lift up his head
when he went on the Graviton
at Waroona Show
because it felt like a powerful magnet,
Charli went crabbing with a long smelly net
which she had to pull up so quickly
while hanging over
the side of the big jetty, and
Oscar surfed spectacularly
down a steep sand dune
at the Rivermouth.
Written with care and imagination
by the students of Room 6!
ADDING SPECIFIC DETAILS to improve our writing
We use precise information about what characters are doing in order to make our writing come alive for our readers.
Using a Mentor Text to see exactly how a good author does it.
After reading “Knuffle Bunny Free” by Mo Willems, about a girl who goes on holiday to visit her grandparents overseas, we are going to look at how Mo used specific details to show what the character was going through and her thoughts and feelings and what the family do together. This makes the character and the story start to come alive or ‘jump off the page’ for the reader instead of simply skimming over or reporting what happened.
After reading this text, we are going to have a go at including specific details into our memory sentences. We can also use adjectives (describing words) and vivid verbs (strong or powerful action words).
WELCOME BACK EVERYONE!
I know that everybody will have had a fabulous time away from school during these holidays! Today we are going to share our memories of this holiday by writing a class poem. Each person will contribute their line to the poem.
To get you started, here is a video of one of my holiday memories. 😎
Feeding Dolphins at Monkey Mia from MRPS on Vimeo.
Wow! You are an awesome bunch of students! You can be very proud of how well you spoke during your celebration and of all the work you have done this term.
Here is The Movie made by Cassidy and Kai. Great job, boys!
Enjoy it everybody.
I think a good time was had by all and the Photobooth was very busy. We’ll print out the photo strips tomorrow.
I am so excited to see what everybody comes as tomorrow. I wonder which Australian animal you have chosen to dress up as?
I’ve worked on Kai and Cassidy’s movie this evening and it’s looking fabulous!!! You will really enjoy watching it. 🙂
I hope you have told your parents how to use the Photobooth and that you all get a chance to take photos with your parents in it tomorrow. Remember to save your photo strip into camera roll so that we can print them out later.
See you all in the morning!
Mrs Veary
Today in Science we are going to continue learning how Scientists classify animals. Today’s lesson will show you how to use a Branching Key to identify different animals based on YES/NO questions.
This video gives you a similar understanding but they are calling it the Dichotomous Key (which means either yes or no key) to classify birds. They have used a table not a diagram to show the key’s answers.
