In Writing today we are going to be looking at descriptive writing.

This means writing in a way that allows the reader to picture exactly what you are describing.  You will be using words to paint a picture for your reader.  This means that you need to choose your words carefully and use lots of really good adjectives (describing words).

Today you will be writing a POEM about your house!  You will need to use adjectives and similes to describe your very own house.  There is a special way to write these poems, so use your planner and try and make your poem really original!

This is how you will be writing your descriptive poems about their own homes.  The first line describes what it looks like, the second how it makes  you feel, the third the sounds you can hear there, the fourth what smells you notice and the last line is a statement about your home.  

Example: [Notice that poems have lines,  NOT SENTENCES, so you start a new line and don’t continue along the same line as a sentence would!

My house looks like…. or My house is …

To create a really good picture for your reader, you will also need to use some similes in your description.  A simile compares your alien to something that we can all picture.  It uses the words like….. or as…

Eg. “My house feels as hot as the furnace of the sun during summer.”

Here are some posters about similes to get your imagination going.  🙂


dog simile


frog simile


You all have such good imaginations that I’m sure you are going to and write amazing poems using lots of descriptive  writing today!

Mrs Veary 🙂

“The Sky Ladder” written by Zoe

Here are Zoe’s pictures to go with her story, which she is reading using beautifully fluency and expression.  Listen for the different voices and expression she uses.

What an exciting story, Zoe!  I got really caught up in the action and intrigue!  Mrs Veary

Press the arrow to start listening, then scroll down through Zoe’s pictures.

Zoe did such a fantastic job!  It would be great if people could post a comment to tell her what you liked about her story.  🙂




Persuasive Argument #2 – This week’s writing task

Today we will be writing our second exposition!  I gave you a lot of help to show you jus how to set out an exposition and how to include these criteria:

  • REASONS 1, 2, 3
  • include facts or examples for each reason
  • 5 paragraphs
  • using strong persuasive language to convince your reader

Today you will be planning your own reasons for this weeks topic:

Storytime – Lost at the Show by Charlie


Charlie wrote such a gripping story, “Lost at the Show” that he has now published it for us all to enjoy.  Click on the audio play button and then click on the Storyjumper  book below and flip the pages to see the pictures he drew to go with his story. (I wonder who can work out just when to turn the page as you listen to him reading the story?)

Book titled 'Lost at the Show'Read this book made on StoryJumper
Great job, Charlie.  Now I can show all of you how to make your own storybook on Storyjumper!  When you have something to write, come and ask me.  😎



ADDING SPECIFIC DETAILS to improve our writing 

We use precise information about what characters are doing in order to make our writing come alive for our readers.

Using a Mentor Text to see exactly how a good author does it.

After reading “Knuffle Bunny Free” by Mo Willems, about a girl who goes on holiday to visit her grandparents overseas, we are going to look at how Mo used specific details to show what the character was going through and her thoughts and feelings and what the family do together.  This makes the character and the story start to come alive or ‘jump off the page’ for the reader instead of simply skimming over or reporting what happened.

After reading this text, we are going to have a go at including specific details into our memory sentences.  We can also use adjectives (describing words) and vivid verbs (strong or powerful action words).



We will be listening to the Three Little Pigs fairytale.  Then we will watch these two video clips telling the story of the Three Little Pigs in two different ways.  Listen carefully to remember the order of events and what exactly is the problem in the story?

  1. ORIGINAL THREE LITTLE PIGS STORY – this is the first of our stories.  (notice that story becomes stories)
  2. [THE THREE LITTLE PIGS – TRADITIONAL STORY – This is an extra you can read after we’ve heard all three versions.]
  3. Now we will be watching two other versions of the story.  I wonder which one of the three will be your favourite?
  4. Silly Symphony – The Three Little Pigs Story

Kermit and The Three Little Pigs

You will be writing your own ending for the story.  Get those imaginations working….. Mrs Veary 🙂

My Out of This World Adventure – Writing Task

Today, as part of our little book about our aliens, we are going to write about an adventure we have with our alien friend.  You can choose what the adventure is, but it needs to be something ‘out of this world’.  Remember when you are writing that for a narrative you need to include:

  • setting – with some really good adjectives and similes to let your reader actually picture and feel what it is like to be there
  • characters – make sure that you give your characters personalities as well as telling us what they look like or what they do or say.  Try to use our Writer’s Circle strategy of show don’t tell (eg. She stamped her feet and beat her fists onto the table. instead of She was angry.)
  • complication (or problem) – which is what your story will be about as it will guide the events of your story
  • at least 3 events before
  • your resolution – where the problem or complication is solved
  • ending – which is the ribbon you tie around your story to bring it to a good end.

Here is some inspiration, but in this piece from the book the adventure is not with an alien like yours will be, but with a Big Friendly Giant!  (BFG by Roald Dahl)

or your alien might take you on a mystery flight where you discover great freedom or secret powers or understandings…like Harry Potter when he flies off with Buckbeak (look at the special effects for some ideas…how do his wings move….think of some really powerful verbs)

Have fun with your writing task and I look forward to reading and hearing all about your special out of this world adventure with your alien friend!

Mrs Veary