Charlie wrote such a gripping story, “Lost at the Show” that he has now published it for us all to enjoy. Click on the audio play button and then click on the Storyjumper book below and flip the pages to see the pictures he drew to go with his story. (I wonder who can work out just when to turn the page as you listen to him reading the story?)
I just LOVE how you all worked so hard at writing your Lost at the Show stories today – such concentration and focus! I am looking forward to hearing a few of them when we share during Author’s Circle – especially where you used SPECIFIC DETAILS and SHOW DON’T TELL!
We use precise information about what characters are doing in order to make our writing come alive for our readers.
Using a Mentor Text to see exactly how a good author does it.
After reading “Knuffle Bunny Free” by Mo Willems, about a girl who goes on holiday to visit her grandparents overseas, we are going to look at how Mo used specific details to show what the character was going through and her thoughts and feelings and what the family do together. This makes the character and the story start to come alive or ‘jump off the page’ for the reader instead of simply skimming over or reporting what happened.
After reading this text, we are going to have a go at including specific details into our memory sentences. We can also use adjectives (describing words) and vivid verbs (strong or powerful action words).
We will be listening to the Three Little Pigs fairytale. Then we will watch these two video clips telling the story of the Three Little Pigs in two different ways. Listen carefully to remember the order of events and what exactly is the problem in the story?
Today, as part of our little book about our aliens, we are going to write about an adventure we have with our alien friend. You can choose what the adventure is, but it needs to be something ‘out of this world’. Remember when you are writing that for a narrative you need to include:
setting – with some really good adjectives and similes to let your reader actually picture and feel what it is like to be there
characters – make sure that you give your characters personalities as well as telling us what they look like or what they do or say. Try to use our Writer’s Circle strategy of show don’t tell (eg. She stamped her feet and beat her fists onto the table. instead of She was angry.)
complication (or problem) – which is what your story will be about as it will guide the events of your story
at least 3 events before
your resolution – where the problem or complication is solved
ending – which is the ribbon you tie around your story to bring it to a good end.
Here is some inspiration, but in this piece from the book the adventure is not with an alien like yours will be, but with a Big Friendly Giant! (BFG by Roald Dahl)
or your alien might take you on a mystery flight where you discover great freedom or secret powers or understandings…like Harry Potter when he flies off with Buckbeak (look at the special effects for some ideas…how do his wings move….think of some really powerful verbs)
Have fun with your writing task and I look forward to reading and hearing all about your special out of this world adventure with your alien friend!